Thursday, March 26, 2020
Story time
This is the story that I made. It is the 2nd post that I've done during these 4 weeks. I used Docs because it is the easiest writing DLO to do. I started to do the writing yesterday. Do you like writing stories?
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Encourage me to make another post
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You have used really good punctuation Tuari. There are some interesting parts in the story such as when everyone laughed at him, isn't it sad that people can be cruel. Did you think about using show don't tell in parts. Instead of saying that he was embarrassed, describe it.
ReplyDeleteHi Tuari, I really like this piece of writing. I could imagine you being the helpful citizen that would find Bill. Have a go at organising her writing into paragraphs. This will give your writing a bit more structure.
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